Dangling participles
are those naughty little phrases
that can't seem to keep track of the subject. They start out fine, but they
lose their way just past the comma.
Make sure the idea or person you've described in the
modifying phrase is the subject of the sentence.
EXAMPLE:
Having nothing else to lose, the cards fell
from Leo's hands. (The cards have nothing else to
lose?)
CLEANED UP:
Having nothing else to lose, Leo lowered his cards.
EXAMPLE:
Blinking back tears, the gun rose to his face. (The gun blinked back tears?)
CLEANED UP:
Blinking back tears, Ellie raised the gun to his face.
EXAMPLE:
Rushing into the emergency room, the screams hit Chuck's ears.
(The screams rushed into the
emergency room?)
CLEANED UP:
Rushing into the emergency room, Chuck heard the screams.
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