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CLEANING UP PROSE

 

Dangling participles are those naughty little phrases that can't seem to keep track of the subject. They start out fine, but they lose their way just past the comma.

Make sure the idea or person you've described in the modifying phrase is the subject of the sentence.

 

 

EXAMPLE:
Having nothing else to lose, the cards fell from Leo's hands. 
(The cards have nothing else to lose?)

CLEANED UP:
Having nothing else to lose, Leo lowered his cards. 

 

EXAMPLE:
Blinking back tears, the gun rose to his face.
(The gun blinked back tears?)

CLEANED UP:
Blinking back tears, Ellie raised the gun to his face. 

 

EXAMPLE:
Rushing into the emergency room, the screams hit Chuck's ears. 
(The screams rushed into the emergency room?)

CLEANED UP:
Rushing into the emergency room, Chuck heard the screams. 

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"The witnesses for the state… have presented themselves to you gentlemen, to this court, in the cynical confidence that their testimony would not be doubted, confident that you gentlemen would go along with them on the assumption—the evil assumption—that all Negroes lie, that all Negroes are basically immoral beings, that all Negro men are not to be trusted around our women, an assumption one associates with minds of their caliber.

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