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If
you've been a writer more
than ten minutes, you've encountered the steadfast writer rule: Show,
Don't Tell. It's repeated so
often, it could be a chant. And though it is excellent advice, it isn't
so easily heeded. Especially when we aren't sure what it means. So
how do we spot the big no-no in our writings?
First, let's distinguish the two
approaches.
Telling is the act of passing along
information. Thoughts, feelings, conversations and events are summarized
profoundly, similar to what you'd hear in a court of law. Almost anyone
can write,
Eula was mad. She hit Gene with her shoe. Not particularly riveting, but
it works well when we simply want the facts.
Showing, on
the other hand, is the art of speaking to the imagination. A
storyteller takes the
time to act out pivotal
scenes because she knows her ability to attract readers rests solely on
her ability to evoke another world. She
can't possibly do that by dumping info into their lap.
She has to let them
experience it.
Eula threw her shoe. It hit him in the back.
"Don't you dare walk out on me!" she shouted.
"You
forget," he shot back. "I'm not your daddy!"
At this point, hopefully, readers' imaginations
have been engaged.
Suddenly they're involved. They
can see
her flying shoe, they can feel it
hit his back, they can hear
the conversation and they can read
between the lines: Eula is a
spoiled daddy's girl.
So whenever we're
unsure whether we're telling instead of
showing, let's check for
these elements:
Little or no dialogue.
If we haven't used quotation marks in a while, it may be time to re-evaluate
our technique. When's the last time our characters actually spoke?
Little or no movement.
If our characters remain in the same space, sitting, mulling, contemplating, wondering, analyzing, remembering,
etc., it may be time to re-define this project. Are we writing a story or
a private journal?
Little or no
ambiance and presence.
If we gloss over important events, giving the rundown on who said what, when, where and
how, and then
slip out of the event without so much as a drink, it may be time to
ponder. Why did we feel the need to include this important event in the first
place?
The goal
is to
maintain reader participation by fueling the imagination with vivid
and specific
language ... to create stories
so lifelike, they linger in the mind
long after the book is closed. Just
like those books we actually buy
and read over and over. The fact we know how they end isn't relevant, is
it? We reread to relive the experience.
That's the effect of, that's the beauty of showing a story.
IN A NUTSHELL
Make the characters do the heavy lifting.
©
2006 Elizabeth Guy
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